Tip Number Two for Reading and Writing

In my last tip I talked about feelings with reading and writing. Today I want to talk about expression. When you write a story, try to use strong words and paint a picture for the reader. In school I learned about show, don't tell. For example, consider the sentence, "She was scared." It is simple, but if you write, "She was trembling." It's another way to show that she was scared. The sentence becomes more interesting.

If you read out loud, try to use expression. For example, don't just say in your regular voice, "This lollipop is tasty." Say it with feeling as if you are actually tasting the lollipop. It would make you excited and happy
wouldn't it?

Here are some examples of strong sentences that I wrote for school homework:

• The supermarket had a sale on inflatable pools with a bouncy dinosaur pool slide. Wow!
• They had to come home immediately from the meeting because a tree fell across their driveway and they had to move it.
• She held the tiny purple flashlight so it would illuminate the dark room.
• Cleaning the oil from the oil spill off the birds was a major problem for the scientists.
• The pink ice-pop froze solid when Ryanne put it in her freezer.
• I love lots of marshmallows dipped in chocolate.

Don't forget to read these aloud with feeling!